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Jess Mahler @jessmahler

Just finished the fleshing out the first scene of Space . Let me know what you think!

jess-pack.mn.co/posts/space-we

I set up Jess' Pack as a combined and alternative. It's free to join through the end of June, starting in July it'll be subscription based, similar to Patreon.

@jessmahler besides a few typos here and there, it caught my attention.

My one suggestion is to highlight somewhere in the start of the story how she is in a cage. It seemed to me that she was free in the marketplace, until the next section where she was taken from the cage.

I LOVE the high tech additions too. The headgear being able to manage heightening senses and the change was really cool!

@drakenhart Thanks, that's a good point.

Unfortunately, typos are endemic to drafts. They don't get corrected until the proofreading stage bc until then, you're never sure what's going to be cut or completely rewritten, to fixing typos is a waste of time.

@jessmahler Aye. I have a bad issue of going back to fix typos and not just writing. :) Also this platform you have your stories on, you can monetize it? I've never seen it before. :) It looks interesting.

@drakenhart Yeah, you can monetize. The major downside compared to Patreon is you can't have multiple membership levels.

The upside (at least for me) is it's geared for community building, so it ALSO makes a nice alternative to Facebook groups or pages if you are trying to get off FB.

@jessmahler Looks like I may be jumping ship from FB/Patreon then for that stuff.

They never really worked all that well with me anyway. :) <3 Thanks for sharing!